On this post I will talk about my lazy past friday. That friday has been my most annoying laziest friday on all my life. First as always, I woke up earlier to go to school. That day I will be in that jail until eight. I will bee there that amount of time because I will be on the debate competition, and honestly it was very interesting. Through 2:35 till 5:00 I did nothing. Debate competition started until 5:00. It was pretty boring. I didn't have money a computer or something to entertain my self. Until 5:00 I went to the library to see the debate. It ended up until 6:00. After that the final was announced, and so I decided to watch it. The Final started at 7:00 and it ended up until 8:00. After debate, my mother called me and she told me that I will go to my friends house because there is a party. So I didn't went home. She chose my outfit for the party. After that she went for me and take me to my friends house. I took a shower there. I was putting on my outfit until I realised that my mother forgot to put my shoes. I have no shoes, the only thing I could to is to go to the party with crocs. So I did that, and honestly it was very comfortable. After that my mom called me and she told me that I will spent the night on my cousin house because it was too late and to far the party from my house. I sleep until 2:00 A.M. Maybe you will say that it wasn't as laziest as a I describe it. But believe me, it was.
Wering crocs on a elegant party, it may be comfortable but its not funny.
JP- You do a nice job describing your feelings and the order of events, but I think that you could make it a little more purposeful. By this I mean giving me a reason about why I should care. Remember that it's important to have a message or theme in your post, and I think that the theme or message of this one could be something about laziness. It's also crucial to have some sort of conflict, so maybe you could focus on if you wanted to do something not lazy, but then you were just very lazy instead. You also have some minor spelling and grammar errors, but I bet you could find a friend to help with those. Good luck with these changes and let me know if you have any questions. Thanks for sharing! :)
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